As a fellow erotic Twine game maker, I salute you! I think you have a good foundation but there are consistent grammatical tense issues where present tense and past tense need to be standardized. I actually think your team shines more in the characterizations department while you should get an editor/proofreader (or maybe more than one) to comb over what you have thus far and do some redlining. I think that would strengthen the game quite a bit.
Hello! Fellow content creator, we really appreciate your feedback! We will try to better our grammar, though we can't hire editors/proofreaders at the moment. But we will keep that in mind!
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As a fellow erotic Twine game maker, I salute you! I think you have a good foundation but there are consistent grammatical tense issues where present tense and past tense need to be standardized. I actually think your team shines more in the characterizations department while you should get an editor/proofreader (or maybe more than one) to comb over what you have thus far and do some redlining. I think that would strengthen the game quite a bit.
Hello! Fellow content creator, we really appreciate your feedback! We will try to better our grammar, though we can't hire editors/proofreaders at the moment. But we will keep that in mind!
Thank you so much for your comment!
i dont like text based games entirely otherwise i would have enjoyeed this
We'll be adding the combat system in the next patch, if you are interested in that! Together with more story
It's not letting me play in browser, is there a way I can download the game
You can download it from here on the page now!
Yay, thanks!