Great game you have here. This one is an improvement over the original in every way, good job! I liked the battle teases, they have a lot of detail and are well written, I love the lewdness of the racoon main character. The animated portraits are a nice touch too. There are some grammatical errors in the writing though, I've noticed this in the first game as well. Some proofreading might help. Overall, good game, I enjoyed it. Can't wait fore more!
Hi! Thank you so much for your feedback. We are glad to know you liked our game! Regarding the text, we are currently working to improve it. Some people are helping us to proofread it.
As a fellow erotic Twine game maker, I salute you! I think you have a good foundation but there are consistent grammatical tense issues where present tense and past tense need to be standardized. I actually think your team shines more in the characterizations department while you should get an editor/proofreader (or maybe more than one) to comb over what you have thus far and do some redlining. I think that would strengthen the game quite a bit.
Hello! Fellow content creator, we really appreciate your feedback! We will try to better our grammar, though we can't hire editors/proofreaders at the moment. But we will keep that in mind!
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Is there like a way to still have the images without the internet?
Hi! The file is available for download if you can't play it on Itch io. However, internet access is required to see the images.
Great game you have here. This one is an improvement over the original in every way, good job! I liked the battle teases, they have a lot of detail and are well written, I love the lewdness of the racoon main character. The animated portraits are a nice touch too. There are some grammatical errors in the writing though, I've noticed this in the first game as well. Some proofreading might help. Overall, good game, I enjoyed it. Can't wait fore more!
Hi! Thank you so much for your feedback. We are glad to know you liked our game! Regarding the text, we are currently working to improve it. Some people are helping us to proofread it.
As a fellow erotic Twine game maker, I salute you! I think you have a good foundation but there are consistent grammatical tense issues where present tense and past tense need to be standardized. I actually think your team shines more in the characterizations department while you should get an editor/proofreader (or maybe more than one) to comb over what you have thus far and do some redlining. I think that would strengthen the game quite a bit.
Hello! Fellow content creator, we really appreciate your feedback! We will try to better our grammar, though we can't hire editors/proofreaders at the moment. But we will keep that in mind!
Thank you so much for your comment!
too short
We'll soon be adding new content to the game!
i dont like text based games entirely otherwise i would have enjoyeed this
We'll be adding the combat system in the next patch, if you are interested in that! Together with more story
It's not letting me play in browser, is there a way I can download the game
You can download it from here on the page now!
Yay, thanks!
I like what you've got here! I can't wait for future content.
Thank you so much for your feedback! We will be implementing new features in the following month (Like the combat system).